Your writing takes all the sex out of it-that doesn't give me a lot of confidence in your product. Heroku's copy is balls to the wall, yours is putting me to sleep. I'll give you a critique based on my own prejudices, for whatever it's worth:<p>Typos: "severs"; "your" should be "you're". Also, you have your own capitalization scheme for "Node.js Camp", perhaps for emphasis? "Meet up" is two words, not one.<p>Tone/confidence: Heroku's top billing is "rock-solid ruby platform". Yours is "a node.js cloud hosting platform". Heroku characterizes itself reassuringly as well as describing itself mechanically. "node.js cloud hosting platform" is a dead fish of a phrase.<p>"COMING SOON!" When-ish? Why shouldn't I just bounce off your page?<p>"Provision servers; build node.js apps; deploy!" Deathly boring copy. You can always tell when someone isn't smiling with their whole face, and the exclamation mark at the end is a fake smile. Compare the confidence of Sinatra's copy to the vague, insincerely jaunty feel of yours ("put this in your pipe/and smoke it". <a href="http://www.sinatrarb.com/" rel="nofollow">http://www.sinatrarb.com/</a><p>What is "provision servers"? Is it like dynos or EC2 instances? I don't understand what your technology is, and whether you're building a truly rich app platform like Heroku or just a thin layer of UI on top of EC2. Heroku really sells me on how cool their engineering is. Do you not talk about it because you have nothing cool to talk about? If you do, you should really start talking about what you're building.<p>"We provide simple, scalable, and powerful node.js hosting for node.js developers in the cloud." A vague, limp snoozefest.<p>"Developers should focus on hacking cool node.js applications, let us handle hosting, deployment, and scaling." This is insincere and it reads wrong. You sound like you're out of touch, trying to appeal to the cool kids with stilted language.<p>"Dedicated Cloud Servers": so is this actually an application platform? It doesn't sound like it.<p>"Git + SVN Integration": your target market probably isn't using svn.
I wish you the best of luck, I think the success of Heroku certainly indicates something similar is needed for node.js (although perhaps they will do something there soon anyway..).<p>My main concern is your name. Heroku can move towards node.js because their name doesn't tie them to any single technology. You might want to change your name so you can consider other technologies.
It's a nice page design and all, but on top of the solutions provided by Heroku and Joyent, there already exists NodeJitsu, which seems pretty solid. Are you offering anything different here? Seems like a bit of "me too" syndrome.<p><a href="http://nodejitsu.com/" rel="nofollow">http://nodejitsu.com/</a>
Does this mean you'll be doing an offer HN? ;) We've been getting spoiled lately. I definitely want to give you a guys a try, see how you stack up against Joyent's node hosting.
My first thought was 'Looks nice, sounds dull'
You need to make your service sound like it stands out from nodejitsu or heroku, even if you already have a more comprehensive service, it doesn't sound like you do.
Crank the hype up to 11.<p>Aside from that its great to see another node.js hosting related startup on the scene, I hope to give you a try sometime in the future.
Like the landing page - but you've got a typo!<p>Under the Dedicated Cloud Servers headline:
"Scale severs up and down on the fly!" Should of course be "servers", not "severs."<p>Good luck with the new endeavor!
Do you think the fact that you proposed a cloud hosting platform was part of the reason for rejection?<p>By the way, the landing page design looks great!