So, the startup is you offering your services as a contractor? That was the longest ad-read pretending to be a blog ever. Many times you used quotes without an author making attribution very difficult.
I’ve have a couple of really useful reviews from this guy: <a href="https://www.roastmylandingpage.com/" rel="nofollow">https://www.roastmylandingpage.com/</a>
This is flagged now--I assume because there's no "Show HN"?<p>But, just wanted to add that if you read that blog post, it's <i>extraordinarily</i> good at relating to its audience and the problems they face. The problem statement is clear and concise. The example email excerpts are well chosen and highly relatable, giving the reader a chance to connect his/her own experience in an almost first-person voice.<p>The itemized dead-end alternative paths are also relatable, and she does an excellent job of differentiating her offering from others the reader may have considered or with which the reader may have been disappointed.<p>In all, it demonstrates considerable proficiency in precisely what she's offering: conversion.<p>While the points about copyediting have some validity and some tightening could help solidify the offering, they are largely pedantic in the main.<p>The only suggestion I would offer is that, this being a new product, it may be difficult to grasp <i>exactly</i> what you're getting and where it leaves you (i.e. how it's actionable). A before/after-style case study or example deliverable could go a long way there.
Best of luck to you. I did this in Aug 2018. My app was already generating a few thousand a month (net revenue), and I still had an incredibly hard time. My biggest failure was 1) not finding a cofounder and 2) not targeting a big enough market.
Good job, I've noticed that copywriting is a major pita when designing a platform with no good solutions atm. Unfortunately, I don't see how your service solves it (please correct me if I don't understand it). After purchasing your service I'll get feedback on my existing copywriting and a copy for one of my sections (how big?).<p>This doesn't solve my problem, because now I still need to write the copy for the rest of my site based on your feedback.
Good luck.<p>I had a similar experience, except that it wasn't my choice. I was given no recourse, but to strike out on my own. Since I am fortunate enough to have the means (I believe that it used to be called "f**k you money," but I always thought that <i>I</i> was the one that got to to say "f**K you," not the potential employers), I was able to do it. In the aggregate, it has turned out better than I ever could have imagined.