Brilliant story.<p>That being said, Page should learn to be a better writer. Take this, for example:<p><i>As for my right ear, I was born deaf in it lol. This was not a fun experience to say the least.</i><p>Being born deaf in one ear is rarely a cause for "laughing out loud," and the "lol" adds nothing to the first sentence. "To say the least" is a cliché and should be eliminated.<p>Anyone could be guilty of these writing sins and in a large enough sample of my own writing I'm sure someone could find clichés. Nonetheless they're pervasive enough to detract from the piece. It wouldn't be a bad idea to get <i>Write Right!</i> (my favorite short, pithy writing book) and William Zissner's <i>On Writing Well</i>.
There's a good general sales lesson here: "research" is not "preparation", even though they're commonly assumed to be the same thing in practice, as was the case here.<p>It's hard to craft a viable proposition if you don't know your target, but simply knowing your target doesn't mean you have a viable proposition. Ultimately, the OP's pitch to Moritz ("my poker success can be translate to success as a venture capitalist") was <i>interesting</i> enough to land him a meeting, but not <i>compelling</i> enough to close the deal.
I loved the email pitch. Seemed to the point and anyone reading it was clear who you are and what you could do.<p>As Mark Twain said in a letter, "if I had more time, I would have written a shorter letter".<p>Still a long way to go for me but I can see my pitches are becoming better. I happy to start with a long winded sentence now and then gradually cut it down.