Usually it couldn't hurt to have more people look at your resume and give advice. Each of us can only know so much, and while you might not take your advice, it could be useful to hear.<p>Be wary that if you pay someone to work on your resume, it's no guarantee that you're more likely to get a job. And the resume is still just the key that opens the lock, you still have to get your foot in the door by doing well on the many levels of interview and screening.
Posting a link has often proven useful for garnering feedback from HN'ers in threads like this. Considering that many HN'ers have seen a lot of resumes, it may not be a bad idea.<p>Good luck.