What makes these suggestions better?<p>Unless someone can demonstrate how effective each tweet is (maybe by retweets, or by how quickly employers respond (if at all), or by actual hirings) they're really just as good as each other. Data is key here.<p>The author is making the <i>very</i> common mistake of believing more information and a more verbose writing style makes better marketing. The opposite is true in so many situations. I can certainly believe that something very short like "I have a first class in X. Please RT" would be <i>much</i> more effective at actually getting retweets.