Looking for feedback on the following:<p>UserMetrix helps companies build software that pleases more users, with less development effort; this is achieved by combining application analytics, with classical error logging and novel usability logging.<p>Would love to hear your thoughts on if you think this would be useful and feedback on the general concept.
<product> accomplishes <generic goal> with the bonus of <unsubstantiated claim>. It uses <meaningless term #1>, <meaningless term #2> and <meaningless term #3>.<p>I'm not trying to be mean. It's just that blurbs like this tell the reader very little about the product. If you want to give a very short description, say very specifically what it does, not how it does it or how you think it might be used.
I think that's pretty vague.<p>I took a look at your sample report (<a href="http://usermetrix.com/projects/2" rel="nofollow">http://usermetrix.com/projects/2</a>) and your home page, and it looks like you have a combination of Java AOP logging and exception logging to a database, and then you make a report based on that? Is there anything "actionable" in the report?<p>So the people buying this service will be Java end-user app developers and their managers, no one else will really need it?<p>How about: "UserMetrix lets Java and Android developers measure feature adoption and exception message trends across applications to pinpoint usability and functional problems before your users notice"
I have to agree with the others that it's very vague. However the usability logging to make better software got me interested because I am starting a software in a similar field. Can I reach you via OpenSHAPA?
Your stated "value proposition" is too vague. The only thing implying the use of "metrics" to achieve the goal is the company name, "UserMetrix," but that leaves one to wonder, "What metrics?"
too vague but also too weak: "that pleases more users" (weak formulation, vague statement). Be bolder than that! Be specific, and focus more on benefits than features. Also, your target group is not well-defined enough ("companies"). Good luck!
awful... this is a value proposition to who? Investors, Users, the world at large? I don't know how you make whos life easier and why should I pay for it..